I love the first one Pup. Great bark that looks well aged with no obvious new growth, nice shiloeete great ramification I like how many branches you have fit in there and how that front branch works. Now you mention it I can see the issue you mention with the taper in the apex. I can imagine it will make that front branch work even better when you reduce that again as you plan.
But I do think it would be even better if that front branch was just a little higher. If nothing else it would help with long term taper. Might upset that upward branch on the first left branch though

Off course that is not going to happen.
All that said what you are doing definitely works as a first class tree.
The second tree I think needs more work than the first. I consider shortening the left branch and complicating the right branch more by creating some branches closer to the trunk. The second left branch needs a little wave put in it finishing up in much the same spot. I think this will help camouflage that it has been moved down to fill a space. Maybe another smaller branch mimicking the downward direction to fill space and create some natural repetition.
In time I would hedge my bets on creating a stronger leader to the right in the apex but only slightly different than you have here at the moment.
I am looking forward to the day I have some off cuts that make great little trees like this

It's too bad your in such a hurry cause the stories I could tell you, Bushels and baskets of stories, hole crates full of stories. But if you can spare a moment I will tell you one story.