sheba
its a good start for a first effort at wiring and shaping. i might just be repeating what mel said but. take a quick squiz at the trunk for the first section compared to the rest of the tree.. its like an arrow, try and add some movement to that to match with the rest of it. it will help. mel has given you the ideas for inside outside bends and foliage etc.
to get better at shaping it is all just practice. same with wiring and everything else. to move along a bit quicker. use the net, books or any other resource for inspiration and ideas, then try and recreate some of these

in the 4 years i have been doing bonsai, i have been looking at books, trees in nature, bonsai pictures, the net. the net is a great resource. try google. pick a style you like and species.
for example juniper shimpaku. go to google and type juniper shimpaku bonsai and search it, then go to all found images. here you will find a lot of pictures for inspiration. some times there is the occasional little one with not much going for it but a lot of the time you will find many, many magnificent trees
jamie
